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Do you think it\'s necessary to have plastic surgery if you are famous in order to be successful?

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I don't think you need to be a celebrity unless you're thinking about it. I try something else when I do it. Appearances aren't everything.

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Hi Elic! 

Yes, it's our character that stands out in a crowd. We need to express self-love and show it to the world. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't think you need to be a celebrity unless you're thinking about it.
 >> I don't think you need to have plastic surgery to be a celebrity unless you are thinking about it. 

I try something else when I do it. 
>> I would try something else when I think of doing it. 

Appearances aren't everything.
>> CORRECT

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