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My favorite food as a child was fish. I really liked fish food when I wans young. However, I do not like fish anymore.

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Hi Alex! 

That's something new. Usually kids love to fast food but yours was different. You are unique. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My favorite food as a child was fish. 
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I really liked fish food when I wans young. 
>> I really liked fish food when I was young. 

However, I do not like fish anymore.
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