¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

My English performance evaluation

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÀÌ*Èñ
2022-04-08 672

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

The restaurant I really want to recommend is Sunsikdang.
There are many menus,but among them, I want to recommend salad and fried rice.
There is cream cheese on the salad, and almonds are on top of it.
So the salad taste is very harmonious.
Next, fried rice has a savory taste that can only be tasted at this restaurant.
So I want to recommend these two menus.
Next, the good thing about this restaurant is that the amount of food is large compared to the price.
But one disadvantage is that some chairs are old and dirty.
Especially, fried rice has the most portion.
Therefore, I would like to say to the owner,"Salad and fried rice are the best among the foods and you are really the best at cooking."

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello, Sarah! 

Thank you for submitting your composition.
I have checked and modified it. 
Please check it out and good luck! ^^ 

You can do it! Again, enjoy the weekend! 

~ Teacher Gina

The restaurant I really want to recommend is Sunsikdang.
There are many menus,but among them, I want to recommend salad and fried rice.
There is cream cheese on the salad, and almonds are on top of it.
So the salad taste is very harmonious.
Next, fried rice has a savory taste that can only be tasted at this restaurant.
So I want to recommend these two menus.
Next, the good thing about this restaurant is that the amount of food is large compared to the price.
But one disadvantage is that some chairs are old and dirty.
Especially, fried rice has the most portion.
Therefore, I would like to say to the owner,"Salad and fried rice are the best among the foods and you are really the best at cooking."

>> The restaurant I want to recommend is Sunsikdang.

There are many menus, but I want to recommend salad and fried rice among them.

There is cream cheese on the salad, and almonds are on top of it.

So the salad taste is very harmonious.

Next, fried rice has a savory taste which you can only try at this restaurant.

So I want to recommend these two menus.

But one disadvantage is that some chairs are old and dirty.

However, another good thing about this restaurant is that the amount of food is large compared to the price.

Especially fried rice has the most portion.

Therefore, I would like to tell the owner, "Salad and fried rice are the best among the foods, and you are the best at cooking."

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
116672 Homework ½Å*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 0
116671 homework ¹Ú*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 1033
116670 My exercise ÀÌ*³ª ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 1079
116669 What is your favorite English movie and why? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 968
116668 Lesson Ȳ*±¸ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-22 943
116667 homework ¹Ú*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 925
116666 difficulties and problems at work ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 5
116665 Tell me about your workplace ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 8
116664 Do you believe in the saying ¡°Tell me who your friends are and... ¾ç*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 527
116663 What\'s the school project that you really like? / What\'s the... ÁÖ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 623
116662 2/21 homework ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 458
116661 What do you wanna study in the future? Why? ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 948
116660 What do you want to improve on your health? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 2
116659 What are the benefits of short travels and long travels? Àå*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 1390
116658 homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 696
116657 Coffee shops ÀÌ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 544
116656 What is your favorite English movie and why? Ȳ*º° ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 489
116655 What is your favorite way to practice your English? Àü*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 695
116654 Do you believe in the saying ¡°Tell me who your friends are and... ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 727
116653 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-21 392

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04