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If you will invest your money in something, what would it be and why?

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If I can do it, I should invest in Samsung and Tesla corporation. I feel like there's no one in South Korea who doesn't have shares in Samsung electronics. And Tesla's shares are rising, It's because there is electronic car in Tesla corporation.

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Hi Elic! 

That would be a great investment. They are continuously growing companies and they will be more successful as time goes by. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can do it, I should invest in Samsung and Tesla corporation. 
>> If I can do it, I will invest on companies such as Samsung and Tesla. 

I feel like there's no one in South Korea who doesn't have shares in Samsung electronics. 
>> CORRECT

And Tesla's shares are rising, It's because there is electronic car in Tesla corporation
>>And Tesla's shares are rising. It's because there produce electronic cars there. 

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