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Writing Task(Apr 8th, 2022)

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Which island do you want to visit soon?
I have a plan to go to Jeju Island in this coming summer. I went to my friend's house today with my family. Actually, my friend is a woman and she works as a civil servant, too. The good thing is that she does the same work as my wife does, so they get along well with each other. Anyway, that's not the point. Today, while talking, we planed to go to Jeju Island together. I mean, with her family. she has a son who is about my daughter's age. My daughter and her son have known each other since their birth. My daughter was born only fifteen days later after he was born. We've been to several places together, sometimes only for one day, and sometimes for two, three days.
Since the COVID-19 pandemic, the Island has been the hottest place. People who used to visit countries overseas had no other choices but to go to the Island instead of going out of Korea. And we do, too.

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Hi, U Seung!

Oh, that's a very famous Island in your country. It would be fun to go there with your family and your family's friend.
Thank you for sharing! Talk to you later :)

~T. Roanne ^_^
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I have a plan to go to Jeju Island in this coming summer. 
>> Correct! 
I went to my friend's house today with my family. 
>> Correct! 
Actually, my friend is a woman and she works as a civil servant, too. 
>> Correct! 
The good thing is that she does the same work as my wife does, so they get along well with each other.
>> Correct! 
Anyway, that's not the point. Today, while talking, we planed to go to Jeju Island together. 
>> Correct! 
I mean, with her family. 
>> Correct! 
she has a son who is about my daughter's age. 
>>She has a son who is about my daughter's age. 
My daughter and her son have known each other since their birth. 
>> Correct! 
My daughter was born only fifteen days later after he was born. 
>> My daughter was born only fifteen days later, after he was born. 
We've been to several places together, sometimes only for one day, and sometimes for two, three days.
>> We've been to several places together, sometimes only for one day, and sometimes for two or three days.
Since the COVID-19 pandemic, the Island has been the hottest place. 
>> Correct! 
People who used to visit countries overseas had no other choices but to go to the Island instead of going out of Korea. And we do, too.
>> Correct! 
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