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What do you think is the most dangerous natural disaster?

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All of natural disasters is very dangerous and can cause harmful damages for the residents. But I think the most dangerous natural disaster is ¡®Typhoon¡¯. It¡¯s the only thing I¡¯ve experienced severe natural disaster before. When I was in elementary school, the typhoon came to Korea called ¡®¸Å¹Ì (Maemi = Cicadas) ¡® that most people considered it most severe typhoon. The damages from it were very serious. There were many deaths and many houses were collapsed. On the street, broken signboards from heavy rain and wind rolled around. Also my home¡¯s windows got cracked. And due to the severe typhoon, Schools announced temporary holidays. No one went out
Therefore as fas as I remember, typhoon is the most dangerous disaster.

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Hi Elena!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

All of natural disasters is very dangerous and can cause harmful damages for the residents. 
>> All natural disasters are very dangerous and can cause harmful damages to the residents. 
But I think the most dangerous natural disaster is ¡®Typhoon¡¯. 
>> CORRECT!
It¡¯s the only thing I¡¯ve experienced severe natural disaster before. 
>> It¡¯s the only severe natural disaster that I¡¯ve experienced before. 
When I was in elementary school, the typhoon came to Korea called ¡®¸Å¹Ì (Maemi = Cicadas) ¡® that most people considered it most severe typhoon. 
>> When I was in elementary school, the typhoon came to Korea called ¡®¸Å¹Ì (Maemi = Cicadas)¡® that most people considered as the most severe typhoon. 
The damages from it were very serious. 
>> CORRECT!
There were many deaths and many houses were collapsed. 
>> There were many deaths and many houses collapsed. 
On the street, broken signboards from heavy rain and wind rolled around. 
>> CORRECT!
Also my home¡¯s windows got cracked. 
>> CORRECT!
And due to the severe typhoon, Schools announced temporary holidays. 
>> CORRECT!
No one went out.
>> CORRECT!
Therefore as fas as I remember, typhoon is the most dangerous disaster.
>> CORRECT!

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