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Have you been to other places before?
Yes i had been to beach for camping with my wife

Where is it, and What's your favorite destination?
It was the East Sea of Korea and my favorite destination is just beach with a clear ocean like Philippines

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Hi, Bob!
Thank you for taking the time to answer the questions. It is a good exercise for you to improve your English writing skills. It seems like you really want the vibe on the beach. I recommend you to visit the Philippines, and I can guarantee you that you can enjoy the beautiful scenery, and beaches here in the Philippines.
~T.Erin

Yes i had been to beach for camping with my wife
>>Yes. We have been to the beach together with my wife for camping.

It was the East Sea of Korea and my favorite destination is just beach with a clear ocean like Philippines
>>It was in the East Sea of Korea, and my favorite destination is going to the beach that has clear water like the beaches in the Philippines.
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