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HOMEWORK:
What is the worst vice for you? Share your idea in a few sentences.

Having vices are detrimental in itself. But above of all, smoking is the worst vice because we can easily accessible and addictive. It slowly ruins us.

Always thank you Donna!
Enjoy the Easter Day with family. See you Monday.

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Good evening, Hae Ju! 

Smoking is a complicated vice because there are always other people who would get involved even if they do not want to smell or inhale the smoke of one person. So, I agree that this is one vice that a lot of people abhor.

I am happy that you have no vice, you would rather sleep.

Study my suggestions here below.  They are very minimal so congratulations to a job well done!

See you next week and happy Easter too! Enjoy your weekend in advance!

-T. Donna =)

Having vices are detrimental in itself. 
>> Having vices is detrimental in itself. 

But above of all, smoking is the worst vice because we can easily accessible and addictive. 
>> But above of all, smoking is the worst vice because we can easily access it and it is addictive. 

It slowly ruins us.
>> Correct!

Always thank you Donna!
>> Thank you always, Donna.

Enjoy the Easter Day with family. See you Monday.
>> Correct!
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