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The one dish for the rest of my life

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If I can eat only one dish for the rest of my life, I will eat Galbi-jjim. It's just think in now. Galbijjim is Korean style braised short rips. It's really delicious. It' s meat is very soft, smooth, and seasoning of meat is proper. I like eat the mixed with rice and remained soup after eating meets. The flavor is perfect. The recipe of Galbijjim is little complicated, so we usually eat it in special day. I like it so much.

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Hi Kate!
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~~ Teacher Sharon
If I can eat only one dish for the rest of my life, I will eat Galbi-jjim. 
>> Correct
It's just think in now. 
>> It's just what I think right now.
Galbijjim is Korean style braised short rips. 
>> Galbijjim is Korean style braised short ribs. 
It's really delicious. 
>> Correct
It' s meat is very soft, smooth, and seasoning of meat is proper. 
>> Its meat is very soft, smooth, and the seasoning of the meat is perfect. 
I like eat the mixed with rice and remained soup after eating meets. 
>> I like mixing it with rice and the juice from the meat.
The flavor is perfect. 
>> Correct
The recipe of Galbijjim is little complicated, so we usually eat it in special day. 
>> The recipe of Galbijjim is a little complicated, so we usually eat it only on special days. 
I like it so much.
>> Correct
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