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What is the best memory you have of your family doing something together? Explain in detail.

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What is the best memory you have of your family doing something together? Explain in detail.

Doing something with my family is a happy event.
We don't meet each other often, so eating dinner together or going on a trip makes me happy.
The best memory is the trip to Hawaii which I went with my parents.
This trip was a free trip without a travel agency, we went on our trips freely.
Sometimes my parents told me that trip was excellent.

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Hi Monica! 

That sounds great! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

Doing something with my family is a happy event.
>> CORRECT

We don't meet each other often, so eating dinner together or going on a trip makes me happy.
>> CORRECT

The best memory is the trip to Hawaii which I went with my parents.
>> The best memory that I have when I went to Hawaii with my parents. 

This trip was a free trip without a travel agency, we went on our trips freely.
>> We were free to do anything since it was a trip with no travel agencies. 

Sometimes my parents told me that trip was excellent.
>> Sometimes my parents tell me that trip was excellent.

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