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I understand the question is when did South Korea stop using cash?

Nowadays many Koreans don¡¯t use cash more than before. They want to use credit cards.
It¡¯s very convenient, we don¡¯t need to carry money and to calculate change. Sometimes we use cash, but we rarely use it.

An additional positive aspect is that the use of money becomes transparent. Countries can secure their taxes more clearly.

The negative part is that everyone is supposed to contribute to the card company, whether they like it or not. Many people complain about the high fees of using credit cards.

Anyway, I think this is a trend. We need to be able to use our cards wisely.

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Hello Elliot!

I admire your consistency in answering homework! Great job!! Yes, you understood the question correctly. Your sentences here are great! Thank you for explaining well. I do think going cashless is great! If I can, I would want to go cashless as wel. I didn't know about the pain of paying card companies! Thank you for including that. I also think one of the disadvantages of going cashless is the consistent urge to spend because you cannot physically see how much you are spending.

Again, Thank you for sending an answer to this homework. Good job!
-Teacher Violet
I understand the question is when did South Korea stop using cash?
>> CORRECT!

Nowadays many Koreans don¡¯t use cash more than before. 
>>CORRECT!
OR>> Nowadays many Koreans avoid using cash more than before. 

They want to use credit cards.
>> CORRECT!

It¡¯s very convenient, we don¡¯t need to carry money and to calculate change. 
>> CORRECT!

Sometimes we use cash, but we rarely use it.
>> CORRECT!

An additional positive aspect is that the use of money becomes transparent. 
>> CORRECT!

Countries can secure their taxes more clearly.
>> CORRECT!

The negative part is that everyone is supposed to contribute to the card company, whether they like it or not. 
>> CORRECT!

Many people complain about the high fees of using credit cards.
>> CORRECT!

Anyway, I think this is a trend. 
>> CORRECT!

We need to be able to use our cards wisely.
>> CORRECT!

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