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I would choose a stressful job with very high pay.
Actually, I don't get a lot of stress by other things.
If my friends get 100 amounts of stress about something, than I get only 50.
So sometimes, I get a low score of a test because I usually not get a lot of stress.
So I think I am suitable for the job and also I want to have very high pay.
Because of these reasons, I will choose a stressful job with very high pay.

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Hi John! 

I think that is a good choice. I would also pick that. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I would choose a stressful job with very high pay.
>> CORRECT

Actually, I don't get a lot of stress by other things.
>> CORRECT

If my friends get 100 amounts of stress about something, than I get only 50.
>> If my friends get a lot of amount of stress about something, then probably I only have half of it. 

So sometimes, I get a low score of a test because I usually not get a lot of stress.
>> So sometimes, I get a low score on a test because I usually don't get stressed. 

So I think I am suitable for the job and also I want to have very high pay.
>> CORRECT

Because of these reasons, I will choose a stressful job with very high pay.
>> CORRECT
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