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Good evening sir Kim. Thank you for giving your opinion about this topic. I appreciate your writing. ^_^\
T. Irene

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1.     Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I agree that Newspapers will remain important source of information than internet News.

>>> I agree that Newspapers will remain important sources of information than the internet.

In case of internet-news have to concentrate and not include detail contents. Because reporter have to upload issue early to website than other competitor.

>>> In case of internet news, it should be focused on direct events because the reporter has to upload it early to fight off competitors.

And if contents that upload in website have long, reader will don¡¯t like that.

>>> If the content is a bit too long, readers won¡¯t like to read them.

As a result, reader will skip for the long issue in their website. 

>>> As a result, readers will skip and look for shorter texts.

I guess that Reader intend to read the various issue in website.

>>> I think readers want to read a lot of news from the internet.

On the other hand, in case of Newspaper have the limited quantity to print issue on Paper.

>>> On the other hand, newspapers are sort of limited in space for printing long texts.

And categorize also have the limited quantity.

>>> They are only allowed specific length.

So in case of Newspaper have few of big issue contents.

>>> So in case of newspapers, they a only a few number of issues.

They handle the detail contents for few of big issue.

>>> They can only write about the top issues for the day.

In my opinion, News through internet website can be handle virous issue because quantity to handle that have big.

>>> In my opinion, the internet can handle to write about a lot of issues because of their unlimited space.

on the other hand, Newspaper have the limited quantity to cover various issue or contents.

>>> Whereas, the newspaper is limited only to top issues.

So Newspaper will handle the big or important issue and include contents more detail.  

>>> So they only handle the big or important issues.

2.     Woman are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

 

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