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Korea is very difficult country to raise children. It is true.

But this is not reason that the compulsory education system and public school are not good.

Korea's school facilities and system are good commpare to the other countries.

The reason is abnaormal educational fevor.

The main cost of raising is not caring for baby but parivate academy cost.

It is also a long and chronic social problem.

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Wonderful day, Ms. Lily!
I guess the only criteria used here is about education. But without academy, do you think it would be easy for parents to raise their kids?
Thank you for writing your thought.
Aki~
Korea is very difficult country to raise children. It is true.
>>> Korea is a very difficult country to raise children. It is true.
>>> It is true that raising children in Korea is very difficult.
But this is not reason that the compulsory education system and public school are not good.
>>> But this is not the reason that the compulsory education system and public schools are not good.
Korea's school facilities and system are good commpare to the other countries.
>>> Korea's school facilities and system are good compared to the other countries.
The reaso n is abnaormal educational fevor.
>>> The reason is abnormal educational fervor.
The main cost of raising is not caring for baby but parivate academy cost.
>>> The main cost of raising is not caring for the baby but private academy cost.
It is also a long and chronic social problem.
>>> CORRECT!
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