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What is your favorite book and why? What lessons can you learn from it?

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My favorite book I ever read is 'Crime and Punishment'.
It is a book about a main character who did a crime and punished by the low by turning himself in.
But the reason why I love this book so much is it expressed the heart and minds of the main character perfectly.
And also we can think about the crime again and also about the poverty.
Because of these reasons, my favorite book is 'Crime and Punishment'.

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Hi John! 

That sounds like a peculiar but exciting book to read. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

My favorite book I ever read is 'Crime and Punishment'.
>> My favorite book that I have read is 'Crime and Punishment'.

It is a book about a main character who did a crime and punished by the low by turning himself in.
>> It is a book about a main character who did a crime and was punished by the law by turning himself in.

But the reason why I love this book so much is it expressed the heart and minds of the main character perfectly.
>> But the reason why I love this book so much is that it expressed the feelings and emotions of the main character perfectly.

And also we can think about the crime again and also about the poverty.
>> Also, it lets us think about the crime that he did. It is also about poverty. 

Because of these reasons, my favorite book is 'Crime and Punishment'.
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