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Should BTS be exempted from military service? Why?

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I think that the BTS must be exempt from military service. They are important people because they show Korean culture to other countries. They are making a heck of money and developing the Korean economy so if they must go into the military, it throws away an opportunity for announcing Korean culture to other countries and improving the socialist economy

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Good afternoon Jay!
You have a different view with other Koreans. Other young men, want the BTS to experience joining the military service because it is part of Korean regulation. They have a point! Others are similar with your thought now.
Thanks for sharing! Good job with your sentences. keep up!
Take care! 
Aki~
I think that the BTS must be exempt from military service. 
>>> CORRECT!
They are important people because they show Korean culture to other countries. 
>>> CORRECT!
They are making a heck of money and developing the Korean economy so if they must go into the military, it throws away an opportunity for announcing Korean culture to other countries and improving the socialist economy
>>> CORRECT!
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