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My favorite book is Harry Potter.I think what I can learn from Harry Potter is the importance of the people around me and persistence not to give up.Harry Potter is a really good book.

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Hi Do Hyeon! 

That's a classic. I love that book too. Great choice. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

My favorite book is Harry Potter.
>> CORRECT

I think what I can learn from Harry Potter is the importance of the people around me and persistence not to give up.
>> I think that I can learn the importance of the people around me and persistence not to give up from this book. 

Harry Potter is a really good book.
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