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Hi, Elly! I need to edit it.

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I just started majoring in Marriage and Family Therapy at Daybreak University. One of my goals is that after graduating from this University, I would like to be a Marriage and Family Therapist. The reason why I would like to be a therapist is to heal and transform myself, my family, and the people around me. As an ordained pastor in Korean Methodist Church, I yearn to let people know God¡¯s love through my profession. My husband is a pastor at Henderson UMC. I usually visit with him when he does pastoral visitations and care. What I have learned so far is that if pastors or their spouses have a professional license in counseling or therapy that would be great for effective ministry. If I got the chance to help people who have to suffer from marriage and family issues, I want to be the one who can help and support them. Above all else, as a person, mom, and pastor¡¯s wife, I expect growth in my innermost self through studying at Daybreak University.

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Hi Pastor,
I hope the editing was to your satisfaction.
May GOD open the doors for you.
GOD bless and take care.
T.Elly.
Hi, Elly! I need to edit it.
CORRECT!
or>>I have to edit this.
I just started majoring in Marriage and Family Therapy at Daybreak University. 
>>I just started studying at Daybreak University, majoring in Marriage and Family Therapy.  
One of my goals is that after graduating from this University, I would like to be a Marriage and Family Therapist. 
CORRECT!
or>>One of my goals is to be a Marriage and Family Therapist after graduating from the University,
The reason why I would like to be a therapist is to heal and transform myself, my family, and the people around me. 
CORRECT!
or>>I would like to be a therapist because I need some healing and transformation myself, including my family, and the people around me. 
As an ordained pastor in the Korean Methodist Church, I yearn to let people know about God¡¯s love through my profession. 
CORRECT!
or>>As an ordained pastor in a Korean Methodist Church, I yearn to show the people and let them know about God¡¯s love through my profession. 
My husband is a pastor at Henderson UMC. 
CORRECT!
or>>My husband works as a pastor at Henderson UMC. 
I usually visit with him when he does pastoral visitations and care. 
>>I usually go with him when he does pastoral visitations and care. 
What I have learned so far is that if pastors or their spouses have a professional license in counseling or therapy that would be great for effective ministry. 
>>What I have learned so far is that if pastors or their spouses have a professional license in counseling or therapy, it would help them greatly in having an effective ministry. 
If I got the chance to help people who have to suffer from marriage and family issues, I want to be the one who can help and support them. 
>>If I got the chance to help people who are suffering from marriage and family issues, I want to be the one who can help and support them. 
Above all else, as a person, mom, and pastor¡¯s wife, I expect growth in my innermost self through studying at Daybreak University.
>>Above all else, as a person, a mom, and a pastor¡¯s wife, I expect growth in my innermost self through studying at Daybreak University.

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