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If you can change something about your lifestyle, what would it be and why?

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If I can change something about my lifestyle, I would like to change a lot of things.
First of all, I¡¯m a night owl. So, I want to be a morning person. When I wake up early, I can spend more time in the morning and start a day leisurely. I want to be more diligent and spend a day efficiently.
Next, I¡¯m a picky eater. Although I don't like seafood and vegetables, I really enjoy eating meat. As I¡¯m getting older, I think it¡¯s getting better. However, I feel I have to try more than now.
Lastly, I tend to eat meals before I¡¯m starving. I have a lot of appetite. Because of these, I often tend to have an upset stomach. I don't really want to feel this trouble so I try to eat something when I feel hungry.
As I mentioned, I want to change these things. If I change them, I would be a healthier and fabulous person.

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Hi Chloe! 

These changes can really change your lifestyle more efficiently. I hope you will be successful in doing so. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

If I can change something about my lifestyle, I would like to change a lot of things.
>> CORRECT

First of all, I¡¯m a night owl s
>>First of all, I¡¯m a night owl so I want to be a morning person. 

So, I want to be a morning person. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

When I wake up early, I can spend more time in the morning and start a day leisurely. 
>> CORRECT

I want to be more diligent and spend a day efficiently.
>> CORRECT

Next, I¡¯m a picky eater. 
>> CORRECT

Although I don't like seafood and vegetables, I really enjoy eating meat. 
>> CORRECT

As I¡¯m getting older, I think it¡¯s getting better. 
>>CORRECT
OR: As I get older, I think it¡¯s getting better. 

However, I feel I have to try more than now.
>> However, I feel I have to try more than before.

Lastly, I tend to eat meals before I¡¯m starving. 
>> CORRECT

I have a lot of appetite. 
>> CORRECT
OR: I have a big appetite. 

Because of these, I often tend to have an upset stomach. 
>> CORRECT

I don't really want to feel this trouble so I try to eat something when I feel hungry.
>> I don't really want to experience this trouble so I try to eat something when I feel hungry.

As I mentioned, I want to change these things. 
>> CORRECT

If I change them, I would be a healthier and fabulous person.
>> If I change them, I would be a healthier and fabulous person.

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