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What is your best experience in life?

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I would have to say it was a trip with my family or friends anywhere. Sometimes, even if the weather didn't go well during the trip, as time went by, even that became a memory. So I will make many memories with them.

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Hi Elic! 

That's a very nice memory. You guys should continue making more. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I would have to say it was a trip with my family or friends anywhere. 
>> I would have to say that best memories that I have is when I go on trips with my family and friends. 

Sometimes, even if the weather didn't go well during the trip, as time went by, even that became a memory. 
>> Sometimes, even if the weather is not good during the trip, everything goes well and stays in our memory. 

So I will make many memories with them.
>> This is why I will continue making memories with them.
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