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Q. Should you do your duty professionally on your first day at work?

Including me, most people can't be perfect on their work at the first time. Especially when it was a first day at work and have no career.
Nervous make people do mistake. But it's a natural thing, the important thing is not repeating it.
If i have a successor, I won't expect professional from her, but wait with patient till she adapt to the job, and I will teach her from A to Z, even if it's a very easy tasks.

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Hi Jane!
Wow, I guess you've got lots of time in your hands to do your homework. Thank you for doing this!
Please check those suggested sentences for your improvement.
Take care. See you on Friday ^^
T. Aki~
Including me, most people can't be perfect on their work at the first time. 
>>> Including me, most people can't be perfect on their work the first time
Especially when it was a first day at work and have no career.
>>> Especially when it was my first day at work and have no career.
>>>  Especially when it was my first day at work and have no experience at all.
Nervous make people do mistake. 
>>> Nervous make people do mistakes. 
>>> Nervous make people commit mistakes
But it's a natural thing, the important thing is not repeating it.
>>> CORRECT
If I have a successor, I won't expect professional from her, but wait with patient till she adapt to the job, and I will teach her from A to Z, even if it's a very easy tasks.
>>> If I have a successor, I don't expect professionalism from her, but wait with patience till she adapts to the job, and I will teach her from A to Z, even if it's a very easy task.
>>> If I have a successor, I don't expect professionalism from her, but I have to wait patiently until she adapts to the job, and I will teach her the ropes.
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