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Writing Task(Apr 27th, 2022)

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Which is more convenient, using public transportation or having your own car?
I prefer to use public transportation. I can do a lot of things while on a bus. I prefer to take a bus rather than subway. It is much faster when taking a subway to get to a destination, but I can not see the outside. There's nothing but just a black darkness out of the window since the subway runs through basement. Taking a bus, on the other hand, I can see the bright sunlight which makes me feel good and the scenery as well, like people walking and crossing the crossroad and big trees on both sides of the road. And, of course, I can read books! I can do whatever I want without being intrerrupted by anyone.However, when I drive my car, all I can and should do is just to grap the wheel tightly with my two hands, to look forward and to be very careful all the time until I get out of the car.

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Hi, U Seung!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one.

Have a good rest!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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I prefer to use public transportation. 
>> Correct! 
I can do a lot of things while on a bus. 
>> Correct! 
I prefer to take a bus rather than subway. 
>> I prefer to take a bus rather than a subway. 
It is much faster when taking a subway to get to a destination, but I can not see the outside. 
>> It is much faster when taking a subway to get to a destination, but I cannot see the outside. 
There's nothing but just a black darkness out of the window since the subway runs through basement. 
>> There's nothing but just a black darkness out of the window since the subway runs through the basement.  
Taking a bus, on the other hand, I can see the bright sunlight which makes me feel good and the scenery as well, like people walking and crossing the crossroad and big trees on both sides of the road. 
>> Correct! 
And, of course, I can read books! I can do whatever I want without being intrerrupted by anyone.
>> And, of course, I can read books! I can do whatever I want without being interrupted by anyone.
However, when I drive my car, all I can and should do is just to grap the wheel tightly with my two hands, to look forward and to be very careful all the time until I get out of the car.
>> However, when I drive my car, all I can and should do is just to grab the wheel tightly with my two hands, to look forward and to be very careful all the time until I get out of the car.
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