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For me, I prefer the traditional books than the electronic books. It can develop the power of think and imagination in my case. And I think my eyes hurt when I read electronic books for a long time.

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Hi Elic! 

Me too! I prefer traditional books as well. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

For me, I prefer the traditional books than the electronic books. 
>> CORRECT

It can develop the power of think and imagination in my case. 
>> It can develop the power of thinking and imagination in my case. 

And I think my eyes hurt when I read electronic books for a long time.
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