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Which one do you think is better, electronic books or traditional books, and why?

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I think both of them are valuable by several reasons. However, if I have to choose just one, I think electronic books are better these days.
That¡¯s because it makes our lives more convenient.
First of all, we don¡¯t need to carry several books in person. We can read a lot of books through mobile phones or smart devices whenever and wherever we want. It¡¯s the biggest advantage for us these days. Besides, we don¡¯t need to go to the bookstores or library to buy it. We can get them easily by web searching on the internet.
However, although electronic books are very convenient, there is attraction only that traditional books give us. Not just for this reason, but for a lot of reasons we have to know the importance of traditional books as well.

1. Although I hate taking multivitamins, I have to bite the bullet by myself for my health.
2. If you don¡¯t want to bite the bullet, you would stop it.
3. I have been biting the bullet for my work.

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Hi Chloe! 

I prefer traditional books too because most of the facts there are accurate. 

PS: You are getting good in making your sentences :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I think both of them are valuable by several reasons. 
>>CORRECT

However, if I have to choose just one, I think electronic books are better these days.
>>CORRECT

That¡¯s because it makes our lives more convenient.
>> CORRECT

First of all, we don¡¯t need to carry several books in person. 
>> First of all, we don¡¯t need to carry several books on hand. 

We can read a lot of books through mobile phones or smart devices whenever and wherever we want. 
>> CORRECT

It¡¯s the biggest advantage for us these days. 
>> CORRECT

Besides, we don¡¯t need to go to the bookstores or library to buy it. 
>> CORRECT

We can get them easily by web searching on the internet.
>> CORRECT

However, although electronic books are very convenient, there is attraction only that traditional books give us. 
>> However, although electronic books are very convenient, there is the attraction the only traditional books give us. 

Not just for this reason, but for a lot of reasons we have to know the importance of traditional books as well.
>> CORRECT

1. Although I hate taking multivitamins, I have to bite the bullet by myself for my health.
>> CORRECT

2. If you don¡¯t want to bite the bullet, you would stop it.
>> 2.CORRECT

3. I have been biting the bullet for my work
>> CORRECT
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