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Which one do you think is better, electronic books or traditional books, and why?

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In my opinion, traditional books are better than electronic books.
First, reading an electronic book may hurt our eyes.
As you know, watching our phones a lot could hurt our eyes (and so as electronic books).
Second, We can feel a specific emotion by reading a traditional book.
A traditional book is made of paper, so we can feel specific emotions by reading it.
Because of these reasons, I think that traditional books are better than electronic books.

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Hi John! 

I prefer traditional books too because most of the facts there are accurate. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

In my opinion, traditional books are better than electronic books.
>>  CORRECT

First, reading an electronic book may hurt our eyes.
>> CORRECT

As you know, watching our phones a lot could hurt our eyes (and so as electronic books)
>> CORRECT

Second, We can feel a specific emotion by reading a traditional book.
>> Second, we can feel a specific emotion by reading a traditional book.

A traditional book is made of paper, so we can feel specific emotions by reading it.
>> CORRECT

Because of these reasons, I think that traditional books are better than electronic books.
>> CORRECT

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