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In your viewpoint, what are the advantages and disadvantages of commuting?

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In my viewpoint, the advantages of commuting are watching books and watching youtube. And In long commuting cases can study for self-improvement. The disadvantages of commuting are tired and hard. Also, don't take your own time.

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Happy Friday Hailey!
Thank you for doing your homework. Please take note of the corrections below and the one we discussed in our lesson earlier. Great job for today! You are doing great!
-T. Caitlyn
In my viewpoint, the advantages of commuting are watching books and watching youtube. 
>> From my point of view, reading a book or watching YouTube are the advantages of commuting.
And In long commuting cases can study for self-improvement. 
>> Also, for long commutes, I can study.
The disadvantages of commuting are tired and hard. 
>> The disadvantages of commuting is that it's tiring and hard.
Also, don't take your own time.
>> Also, public transport usually has a fixed schedule so I need to adjust based on that.
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