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What is your definition of success and failure in life?

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I think the failure is a step to success. In my definition, when I experience a failure, I should find to learn something like why I failed the interview? or what I'm lack of, So these experiences make me more strong and finally success.

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Hi Elic! 

You have a very positive mindset. We should always learn from these things since it makes us a better version of ourselves. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

I think the failure is a step to success.
>>I think failure is a step to success.

In my definition, when I experience a failure, I should find to learn something like why I failed the interview? or what I'm lack of, 
>> In my opinion, when I experience failure, I should find know the reason behind it and know how to improve myself and fix the things I lack in. 

So these experiences make me more strong and finally success.
>> So these experiences make me more stronger and meet success in life. 

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