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How can we prevent crime from happening?

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How can we prevent crime from happening?
=> This question remind me story in a movie "Minority Report" which predict potential crimes by prophetesses.
Even it would be doable in the future, we need to reinforce our legal system realistically.
And, to make our society safer, we need to be prudent when we elect lawmakers.

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Hello Jong-han, you finished your writing task today just like you wanted. Great job for that. I appreciate your time and effort.~ T. Lyn
This question remind me story in a movie "Minority Report" which predict potential crimes by prophetesses.
>>This question reminds me of the story of the movie 'Minority Report', which predicts the potential crimes of female prophets.
Even it would be doable in the future, we need to reinforce our legal system realistically.
>>Even if it is possible in the future, realistically, the legal system should be strengthened.
And, to make our society safer, we need to be prudent when we elect lawmakers.
>>Correct. And to make our society safer, we need to be careful when electing members of the National Assembly.
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