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I think traditional books are better than electronic books. Because, I think book have to made of paper. Also, for me, it is more familiar to read traditional books than electronic books.

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Hi Alex! 

I think so too. 

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I think traditional books are better than electronic books. 
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Because, I think book have to made of paper. 
>> It is because I books are made of paper. 

Also, for me, it is more familiar to read traditional books than electronic books.
>> Another reason is that I am more familiar in terms reading traditional books than electronic books. 
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