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Which one do you think is better, living with relatives or living alone?

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Sometimes, I want to be alone for thinking, clearing my head and when resting comfortably. But It's better living with relatives. I like to talk and listen with someone. And I think people don't get depressed when they talk with other people.

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Hi Elic! 

It's a very tough choice. 

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Sometimes, I want to be alone for thinking, clearing my head and when resting comfortably. 
>> Sometimes, I want to be alone to think, clear my head and rest comfortably. 

But It's better living with relatives. 
>> But it's better living with relatives. 

I like to talk and listen with someone.
>> CORRECT

And I think people don't get depressed when they talk with other people.
>> CORRECT

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