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Which one do you think is better, living with relatives or living alone?

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Which one do you think is better, living with relatives or living alone? Explain your answer.

If I have important freedom and independence, I should live in alone.
If not, I should stay with the family.
I need to decide my priorities in life.
It depends on my mind entirely.
I still want to live with my parents.

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Hi Monica! 

It's a very tough choice. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon

If I have important freedom and independence, I should live in alone.
>> If I want freedom and independence, I should live in alone.

If not, I should stay with the family.
>> CORRECT

I need to decide my priorities in life.
>> CORRECT

It depends on my mind entirely.
>> CORRECT

I still want to live with my parents.
>> CORRECT
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