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Why cannot some people overcome stress? Answer in a few sentences.

I think they don't know how to deal with stress. Sometimes I couldn't control myself when I had a lot of stress like them. We should take a enough break so that we manage our body's condition.

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Hello, Hae Ju, good evening!

I agree with you. Some people are not well skilled in dealing with stress in their lives. They maybe ashamed to tell others that they have difficulties and cannot solve their problem at hand. We can have these moments too and when they happen, we need to seek help and have a trusted person to vent out what's wrong with us.

Thank you so much for reading carefully and going over all of your grammar feedbacks always, Hae Ju! I appreciate all the effort and energy you put into your work. Excellent job!

See you in class!

-T. Donna =)

I think they don't know how to deal with stress. 
>> Correct!

Sometimes I couldn't control myself when I had a lot of stress like them. 
>> Correct!

We should take a enough break so that we manage our body's condition.
>> We should take enough break so that we can manage our body's condition.

 I try my best for a review with your feedback. 
>> I try my best to review your feedback. 

Thank you Donna. Have a good night!
>> Correct!
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