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Do you think it\'s important to spend time by yourself?

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Yes, I think so. There are two types people who want to be with their friends or to be alone when they want to get some rest. And I'm definitely the latter

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Hello Rachel!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


Yes, I think so. 

>> CORRECT!

There are two types people who want to be with their friends or to be alone when they want to get some rest.

>> There are two types of people, those who want to be with their friends or those who want be alone when they want to get some rest.

 And I'm definitely the latter

>> I'm definitely the latter.

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