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I am very close to my father's family. We even met yesterday. But she is not close to her mother's family. Because we don't see each other often, so we don't know each other well.

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Hello Kim So Yun!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I am very close to my father's family. 

>> CORRECT!

We even met yesterday. 

>> CORRECT!

But she is not close to her mother's family. 

>> But I'm not close to my mother's family. 

Because we don't see each other often, so we don't know each other well.

>> It's because we don't see each other often, so we don't know each other well.

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