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There are some reasons to fail the important infromations when I wtite an email: Urgency, Low concentration and lack of information. Firstly, taking an urgent matter sometimes leads me to fail the information in email. For example, I should write an email as soon as possible, so I sent an email not checking the information in details. This made me a mistake. In addition, Lack of concentration also leads me to fail the contents. We should focus on writing emails not to miss the information. Finally, when I have lack of infotmation, I used to omit it. Thus, I should try to gather all of the information as much as possible. In conclusion, there are three reasons about missing the information in emails I mentioned above, so we should make sure to convey infotmation in details.

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Hello Sophia, you really nailed that composition homework. You did a great job answering the question given. Give yourself a hand. ~T. Lyn
There are some reasons to fail the important infromations when I wtite an email: Urgency, Low concentration and lack of information.
>>There are several reasons why important information fails when I write emails: urgency, low concentration, and lack of information.
Firstly, taking an urgent matter sometimes leads me to fail the information in email.
>>Correct. First, when dealing with urgent matters, information in emails is sometimes missing.
For example, I should write an email as soon as possible, so I sent an email not checking the information in details.
>>Correct. For example, I sent the email without checking the details because I need to compose the email as soon as possible.
This made me a mistake.
>>What I did was a mistake.
In addition, Lack of concentration also leads me to fail the contents.
>>In addition, lack of concentration also causes the content to fail.
We should focus on writing emails not to miss the information.
>>Correct. We should focus on composing our email so we don't miss any information.
Finally, when I have lack of infotmation, I used to omit it.
>>Finally, when information was lacking, it was often omitted.
Thus, I should try to gather all of the information as much as possible.
>>Therefore, I should try to gather all the information possible.
In conclusion, there are three reasons about missing the information in emails I mentioned above, so we should make sure to convey infotmation in details.
>>In conclusion, there are three reasons why information is missing from the email I mentioned above, so I think it is necessary to convey the information in detail.
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