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What do you think is the hardest job in the world?

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All of the jobs are hard. But I think the hardest job is to be a parent. As I get older, I feel like I'm taking responsibility for my family, feeding them, and going into society. But I won't be a mechanic of aircraft in my next life. :)

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Hi Elic! 

Yes, being a parent is no joke. It's a really hard  job but one of the most fulfilling. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

All of the jobs are hard. But I think the hardest job is to be a parent. 
>>  All jobs are hard but I think the hardest one is being a parent. 

As I get older, I feel like I'm taking responsibility for my family, feeding them, and going into society. 
>> As I get older, I feel like I'm taking responsibility for my family such as feeding them and earning a living for them. 

But I won't be a mechanic of aircraft in my next life. :)
>> But I think I will not pick being a mechanic in my next life. 
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