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I wish live with my grandmother

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Today homework topic is very serious to me.
Now my grandfather he is so sick.
And he should going to the sanatorium.
And then my grandmother she would be leave alone in Gunsan.
I wish live with her, my grandma told to my aunt.
She never going to live with other family.
She wants live alone.
It breaks my heart. I wish my grandmother would open her heart

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Hi Ann! 

Oh, I'm so sorry to hear that. I wish that everything will be better. :( 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

Today homework topic is very serious to me.
>> CORRECT

Now my grandfather he is so sick.
>> Now, my grandfather is so sick. 

And he should going to the sanatorium.
>> And he should go to the sanatorium.

And then my grandmother she would be leave alone in Gunsan.
>> With that, my grandmother would live alone in Gunsan. 

I wish live with her, my grandma told to my aunt.
>> I wish that I could live with her. 

She never going to live with other family.
>> She is never going to live with another family member. 

She wants live alone.
>>She wants to live alone. 

It breaks my heart. 
>> CORRECT

I wish my grandmother would open her heart
>> CORRECT

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