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Is there something you wish you could do with your free time but can¡¯t?

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There could be some activities that people can't do with their free time but they want.
But I don't have any.
I can do all the things that I want to do in my free time.
Because my parents let me to do a lot of things that I want to do in my free time.
So if I see some of my friends, they actually want to do some activities such as playing video games, or hanging with friends, but they
- can't because of their parents.
But I can do a lot of things so I don't need to care about this case.

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Hi John! 

In that case, you are very lucky!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

There could be some activities that people can't do with their free time but they want.
>> There could be some activities that people can't do during their free time but still want to. 

But I don't have any.
>> Unfortunately, I don't have any. 

I can do all the things that I want to do in my free time.
>> CORRECT

Because my parents let me to do a lot of things that I want to do in my free time.
>> It's because my parents let me to do a lot of things that I want to do. 

So if I see some of my friends, they actually want to do some activities such as playing video games, or hanging with friends, but they
- can't because of their parents.
>> So if I see some of my friends, they actually want to do some activities such as playing video games, or hanging with friends, but they
 can't because they're parents. 

But I can do a lot of things so I don't need to care about this case.
>> CORRECT


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