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What is the most memorable birthday you\'ve ever had? Explain your answer.

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The birthday of 8 years old was the most memorable birthday I ever had.
I invited some of my friends to my house and I enjoyed the party.
And it was the first birthday party to me so it was the most memorable birthday I ever had.

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Hi John! 

I hope you will have more birthdays like this. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

The birthday of 8 years old was the most memorable birthday I ever had.
>> My 8th birthday is the most memorable birthday I've ever had. 

I invited some of my friends to my house and I enjoyed the party.
>> CORRECT

And it was the first birthday party to me so it was the most memorable birthday I ever had.
>> And it was my first birthday party so it is very memorable. 
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