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Do you think North Korea and South Korea will unite soon?

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Actually, I have to say it's a No. The young people don't want to unite them. It's because the most important reason is tax. If reunification is achieved, South Korea, which can afford to pay more taxes to feed North Korea. And even though we are of the same race, it takes a long time to overcome cultural differences, So I don't have deep thoughts about unification.

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Hi Elic! 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

Actually, I have to say it's a No. 
>> Actually, I have to say no. 

The young people don't want to unite them. 
>> The younger generation don't want them to unite. 

It's because the most important reason is tax. 
>> The main reason is tax. 

If reunification is achieved, South Korea, which can afford to pay more taxes to feed North Korea. 
>> If reunification is achieved, South Korea can afford to pay more taxes to feed North Korea. 

And even though we are of the same race, it takes a long time to overcome cultural differences, So I don't have deep thoughts about unification.
>> Even though we are of the same race, it takes a long time to overcome cultural differences so I don't have any deep thoughts about unification. 

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