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Health insurance covers a reduction of only men¡¯s boobs. It needs to be applied to breast reduction for women equally because its price is more expensive than breast augmentation.

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Hi there, Judy!

This is quite unfair. However, the law is just and in this case, it favors the men. After all, breast augmentation is a form of luxury and not a necessity. However, I understand the plight of women here. 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about your health care system in your country. Both of your sentences are very good and perfect in grammar!

See you tomorrow!

-T. Donna =)

Health insurance covers a reduction of only men¡¯s boobs. 
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It needs to be applied to breast reduction for women equally because its price is more expensive than breast augmentation.
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