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Driving under influence of alcohol is a big problem these days. Should your country ban alcohol?

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2022-05-19 708

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I think alcohol must ban because alcohol influences driving and other many things. Many people annually are died because of driving under influence of alcohol. And, people that drink alcohol are affected psychologically by alcohol. So, most crimes take place because of alcohol. I think if alcohol ban in my country, the death rate highly reduce. Therefore, I think alcohol must is banned.

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Good day, Jay!
I couldn't help agreeing with you that most cases of accident was due to DUI. I hope that all drivers or motorist will become more responsible not onlyh for their lives but the welfare of people surrounding them.
Thank you for this! See you later.
T. Aki~
I think alcohol must ban because alcohol influences driving and other many things. 
>>> I think alcohol must be banned because alcohol influences driving and other many things. 
Many people annually are died because of driving under influence of alcohol. 
>>> Many people annually die because of driving under influence of alcohol.
And, people that drink alcohol are affected psychologically by alcohol. 
>>> And, people that drink alcohol are affected psychologically,
>>> And people are affected psychologically by alcohol.
So, most crimes take place because of alcohol. 
>>> CORRECT
I think if alcohol ban in my country, the death rate highly reduce. 
>>> I think if alcohol will be banned in my country, the death rate will highly reduce.
Therefore, I think alcohol must is banned
>>> Therefore, alcohol must be banned
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