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Yes, I'm so worried about it because I am already 18, and I have little time to prepare for my unexpected future. It makes me nervous sometimes.

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Hi Kane ! 
 
It's normal to be nervous. It shows that you care. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon. 

Yes, I'm so worried about it because I am already 18, and I have little time to prepare for my unexpected future.
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