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Q:Do students get enough sleep on school days?
A:I think they can't because of academies.
Most students go to academies when it's school days, and they come back to home when it's ten P.M.
So, they said that they sleep when it's twelve so I think it's not that enough.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think they can't because of academies.

>> CORRECT!
Most students go to academies when it's school days, and they come back to home when it's ten P.M.

>> Most students go to academies when it's school days, and they go back home when it's 10 P.M.
So, they said that they sleep when it's twelve so I think it's not that enough.

>> So, they said that they sleep when it's twelve so I think it's not enough.

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