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How do you think can we solve traffic problems there in South Korea?

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I think people usually take public transportation at rush hours. And they have to regulate their own car about once a month. Above all, I think we increase the bus and subway lines and reduce the interval between trains.

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Hi Elic! 

Those are great ideas!
 
Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think people usually take public transportation at rush hours. 
>> CORRECT

And they have to regulate their own car about once a month. 
>> CORRECT

Above all, I think we increase the bus and subway lines and reduce the interval between trains.
>> Above all, I think we should increase the number of buses and subway lines and reduce the interval between trains.

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