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How do you think can we solve traffic problems there in South Korea?

The first thing to do is strengthening traffic laws. Because traffic laws are not strong in South Korea. So there are quite a few drunk drivers in South Korea. And also there are a lot of drivers who are not good at driving. So i think driving test has to get harder than now.

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The first thing to do is strengthening traffic laws. 
>> The first thing to do is to strengthen traffic laws. 

Because traffic laws are not strong in South Korea. 
>> It is because the traffic laws here are weak in South Korea. 

So there are quite a few drunk drivers in South Korea.
>>CORRECT

And also there are a lot of drivers who are not good at driving. 
>> Also, there are a lot of drivers who are not good at driving so I think that they should make driving tests harder. 

So i think driving test has to get harder than now.
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