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I use public transport every day.

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There are advantages and disadvantages to using public transport.

The advantage is that you don't have to drive yourself. So you don't have to stress about driving. You can even sleep. And the cost is cheap.

The downside is that you have to walk to the bus stop to use public transport. And when there is no seat, it can be difficult to use it standing up. Also, waiting time is required, so the travel time may be long.

I judge the advantages of using public transportation better than the inconvenience of the disadvantages. So I use public transport every day.

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Good afternoon, Elliot! ^^


Thank you for answering the Homework question. Please take note of the corrections/ suggestions below: 


Writing Task: Read and answer the questions in complete sentences.

1. What are the pros and cons of riding public transportation?


Your Answer:  There are advantages and disadvantages to using public transport.


The advantage is that you don't have to drive yourself. So you don't have to stress about driving. You can even sleep. And the cost is cheap.

The downside is that you have to walk to the bus stop to use public transport. And when there is no seat, it can be difficult to use it standing up. Also, waiting time is required, so the travel time may be long.

I judge the advantages of using public transportation better than the inconvenience of the disadvantages. So I use public transport every day.


Corrected Version: 


There are both advantages and disadvantages to using public transport.

One of the advantages is that you don't have to drive yourself, so you don't have to be stressed about driving. You can even sleep, and the fare is also cheap. <You can also use the word 'fare' instead of cost when talking about the money needed to ride public transportation.>

The downside is that you have to walk to the bus stop to use public transport. Also, when there are no available seats, it can be difficult to ride the bus with you standing up. You also need to think about the waiting time for the bus/ train, so the travel time may be longer than if you use your own transportation. 

As for me, I think the advantages of using public transportation, outweighs the inconveniences or disadvantages, that is why, I use public transport everyday. 


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Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me about the topic! I absolutely agree with the advantages and disadvantages that you stated here. ^^


Have a great night and weekend ahead, Elliot! See you again next week! :-) 


-Miya ^^

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