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What are the important news in your country right now?

our country has no important news right now.
The most important presidential election of this year ended.
The important news in the world is the war between Russia and Ukraine.
Nobody can predict when the war will end.
Everyone hopes that the war is ended soon.

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Hi Monica! 
 
I hope so too. A lot of people are suffering now. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

our country has no important news right now.
>>  Our country has no important news right now.

The most important presidential election of this year ended.
>> The most important was the presidential election this year, which has already ended. 

The important news in the world is the war between Russia and Ukraine.
>> CORRECT

Nobody can predict when the war will end.
>> CORRECT

Everyone hopes that the war is ended soon.
>> Everyone hopes that the war will end soon.

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