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Are you ready to live with a \'living\' robot in your home? Answer in a few sentences.

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Now a days, already living robot is in our house.
For example,

1. smart lamp - if I talk 'turn on', the lamp can ignore my voice, after than the lamp will turn on.
2. robot cleaner - if I make a reservation when it clean, the robot cleaner will work.

So, If i can handle it, my life will be comfortable. Just what i do is preparing money.

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Hello there, Jisu!

It's great to see you here on the composition page. Writing answers will help you reinforce your grammar knowledge as you will have to put them into application. I must say that this one below is a very good try. There are a few suggestions I made. So study them carefully and keep writing! Thank you very much for the wonderful effort!

See you again soon!

-T. Donna

Now a days, already living robot is in our house.
>> Nowadays, living robots are already  in our house.
or: Nowadays, living robots are in our house already.

For example,
>> For example:

1. smart lamp - if I talk 'turn on', the lamp can ignore my voice, after than the lamp will turn on.
>> if I say 'turn on', the lamp can ignore my voice, after that the lamp will turn on.

2. robot cleaner - if I make a reservation when it clean, the robot cleaner will work.
>> if I make a reservation when it cleans, the robot cleaner will work.

So, If i can handle it, my life will be comfortable. 
>> Correct!

Just what i do is preparing money.
>> What I will just do it to (prepare/earn) money.
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