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Are you ready to live with a \'living\' robot in your home? Answer in a few sentences.

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Now a days, already living robot is in our house.
For example,

1. smart lamp - if I talk 'turn on', the lamp can ignore my voice, after than the lamp will turn on.
2. robot cleaner - if I make a reservation when it clean, the robot cleaner will work.

So, If i can handle it, my life will be comfortable. Just what i do is preparing money.

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It's great to see you here on the composition page. Writing answers will help you reinforce your grammar knowledge as you will have to put them into application. I must say that this one below is a very good try. There are a few suggestions I made. So study them carefully and keep writing! Thank you very much for the wonderful effort!

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Now a days, already living robot is in our house.
>> Nowadays, living robots are already  in our house.
or: Nowadays, living robots are in our house already.

For example,
>> For example:

1. smart lamp - if I talk 'turn on', the lamp can ignore my voice, after than the lamp will turn on.
>> if I say 'turn on', the lamp can ignore my voice, after that the lamp will turn on.

2. robot cleaner - if I make a reservation when it clean, the robot cleaner will work.
>> if I make a reservation when it cleans, the robot cleaner will work.

So, If i can handle it, my life will be comfortable. 
>> Correct!

Just what i do is preparing money.
>> What I will just do it to (prepare/earn) money.
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